Gejitchi
Well-known member
NOTE: The following message is an honest (pretty negative) critique. If you can't take it, don't read the following paragraph. If you can, read on; some advice follows the meanness. 
Anyway,
There's no rhyme scheme at all. That'd be okay if the lyrics had any depth and complexity - unfortunately, these don't. The body of the lyrics seems to just be reiterating the title of the song over and over. I know you are young, but I'm afraid someone has to be honest here - these lyrics are rather poor.
I'm not master lyrics writer, but I'll try my hand at some advice:
Try to think about writing a song like you are telling a story. It's easiest to write songs when you think about them like they have a beginning, middle, and end, and with a chorus that is the "main idea." Not all songs are necessarily written as such, but it's a good starting place. Take a topic you know about (crushes, parents hatin', rumours, etc.) and try and tell a story about it in song.
Try rhyming so that the song flows better. Unless you know what you're doing, unrhymed tunes can sound pretty choppy. Also, thinking about actual rhyming will help you actually think about what you're writing - you'll choose your words carefully so they mesh well, resulting in a better song.
Remember songs are sung over music most of the time. (duh. xD) That means that there has to be a certain amount of rhythmic since about the placement of words and accents of syllables. You shouldn't try to fit a 5 syllable word in where there is only room for a 1 syllable word. The words should make sense with music - think about this when writing.
Finally, remember the age old saying: "Rome wasn't built in a day." Well, good songs usually aren't written in a day, either. They often take a long time with many revisions before you are happy with the result. It's about quality, not quantity.
Happy writing.
Anyway,
There's no rhyme scheme at all. That'd be okay if the lyrics had any depth and complexity - unfortunately, these don't. The body of the lyrics seems to just be reiterating the title of the song over and over. I know you are young, but I'm afraid someone has to be honest here - these lyrics are rather poor.
I'm not master lyrics writer, but I'll try my hand at some advice:
Try to think about writing a song like you are telling a story. It's easiest to write songs when you think about them like they have a beginning, middle, and end, and with a chorus that is the "main idea." Not all songs are necessarily written as such, but it's a good starting place. Take a topic you know about (crushes, parents hatin', rumours, etc.) and try and tell a story about it in song.
Try rhyming so that the song flows better. Unless you know what you're doing, unrhymed tunes can sound pretty choppy. Also, thinking about actual rhyming will help you actually think about what you're writing - you'll choose your words carefully so they mesh well, resulting in a better song.
Remember songs are sung over music most of the time. (duh. xD) That means that there has to be a certain amount of rhythmic since about the placement of words and accents of syllables. You shouldn't try to fit a 5 syllable word in where there is only room for a 1 syllable word. The words should make sense with music - think about this when writing.
Finally, remember the age old saying: "Rome wasn't built in a day." Well, good songs usually aren't written in a day, either. They often take a long time with many revisions before you are happy with the result. It's about quality, not quantity.
Happy writing.
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