Song! I made it.

[Tamagirl_Desy]

Ok I made up a song that has to do with child abuse. I would like to thank my cousin for coming up with the first line of the song

Sittin There

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

She is crying, dying

Bleeding, needing

Somebody to help her

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

She gets hit every night

If she ever makes a mistake

All her smiles that she has are always fake

 

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

Wishing she could be free

Why couldn't anyone see?

She wants to run wild

She wants to let loose

But she just sits there on the stairwell

Doing not a thing

Even if whats happen-ing

Is just another form of child abuse

It's not the best song I ever wrote, and it would sound better if you knew the tune.

*Tgd*

 

[Rey Mysterio]

It's really good- I wish I could write a song like that!

 

[furawatchi girl]

That is very good! :furawatchi: this reminds me of a poem my little cousin wrote. i i will try to find it.... here it is!

Our parents would bite me,

and scratch me with tin,

they beat me and fight me,

I can not win.

my name is kate,

and i am only eight

i have an older sister,

my mom used to kiss her,

but now my mom hates me,

ever since i said i miss her,

because Marcie has been dead,

for 2 years and ahead.

I hear my dad come through the door,

his feet stomp loudly on the floor,

i quietly peek out from behind the wall,

He yells and says i am too small,

he grabs a knife,

amies at me,

he throws it hard,

i can not see,

it hits the wall,

i starty to bawl,

i run to my room,

he follows too.

i shut my door,

he throws it open,

he grabs my hair,

which he tares,

i scream in pain,

he does not hear,

i say where is my daddy?

he says i am right here

as he grabs my neck,

squeses hard,

i can't breathe,

He rasie me high,

drops me hard,

he slams the door,

as i die on the floor.

My name is Kate,

and i am only eight,

as i lay here,

drowning in blood and hate.

i think it is sad. :kuribotchi:

~Reanna

 

[tama815]

Awww, that is sad. They both are but the songs and poems are good. They convey a good message.

 

[tamakitty710]

Aw, that's sad... The poem and the song! The poem is sadder, though (no offense or anything... Songs tend to be a little more upbeat because they are songs xD). Bravo!

 

[nlopez2]

the poem and the song is very sad......and i agree the poem sound sadder (no offense) but they r both really sad. oh and skippy-tama did that really happen to ur cousin or did she just make it up? sorry i wanna know!

 

[wildcat_gal_101]

Wow, the song and poem are really good!

 

[tamtamkitty07]

Those were both really well written!! Too bad more people felt that way about child abuse, it's a very serious thing.

Good work though, both were very sad and made you think a little.

 

[ichagotchi freak]

STOP CHILD ABUCE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!IT WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAY TO WRONG!!!!!

 

[VannessaHudgensFan102]

I'll try to make a tune to it!

 

[VannessaHudgensFan102]

That is very good! this reminds me of a poem my little cousin wrote. i i will try to find it.... here it is!
Our parents would bite me,

and scratch me with tin,

they beat me and fight me,

I can not win.

my name is kate,

and i am only eight

i have an older sister,

my mom used to kiss her,

but now my mom hates me,

ever since i said i miss her,

because Marcie has been dead,

for 2 years and ahead.

I hear my dad come through the door,

his feet stomp loudly on the floor,

i quietly peek out from behind the wall,

He yells and says i am too small,

he grabs a knife,

amies at me,

he throws it hard,

i can not see,

it hits the wall,

i starty to bawl,

i run to my room,

he follows too.

i shut my door,

he throws it open,

he grabs my hair,

which he tares,

i scream in pain,

he does not hear,

i say where is my daddy?

he says i am right here

as he grabs my neck,

squeses hard,

i can't breathe,

He rasie me high,

drops me hard,

he slams the door,

as i die on the floor.

My name is Kate,

and i am only eight,

as i lay here,

drowning in blood and hate.

i think it is sad.

~Reanna

Oh my gosh!That's so sad!Her dad would grab her neck!If I were her I would call the police!

 

[Monchi]

Ok I made up a song that has to do with child abuse. I would like to thank my cousin for coming up with the first line of the song
Sittin There

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

She is crying, dying

Bleeding, needing

Somebody to help her

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

She gets hit every night

If she ever makes a mistake

All her smiles that she has are always fake

 

She's just sittin there on the stairwell

Wishing she could be free

Why couldn't anyone see?

She wants to run wild

She wants to let loose

But she just sits there on the stairwell

Doing not a thing

Even if whats happen-ing

Is just another form of child abuse

It's not the best song I ever wrote, and it would sound better if you knew the tune.

*Tgd*

wow! you should totally write more songs! there so awesome I could play them on my guitar anyday.........

 

[VannessaHudgensFan102]

wow! you should totally write more songs! there so awesome I could play them on my guitar anyday.........

Check out my songs:https://www.tamatalk.com/IB/index.php?showtopic=96624

 

[Monchi]

Check out my songs:https://www.tamatalk.com/IB/index.php?showtopic=96624

it's cute

 

[furawatchi girl]

the poem and the song is very sad......and i agree the poem sound sadder (no offense) but they r both really sad. oh and skippy-tama did that really happen to ur cousin or did she just make it up? sorry i wanna know! 

Do you mean me? because i know skimpy~tama and me have the same avi. Yes my little cousin did write it (and my little i mea about 1 year younger). No that did not happen to her, her name is Valerie. I think it is good to and also she is a published poet (she actualy had a poem published in a book). I am so glad everyone likes it and thinks it really demonstrates the horrors of child abuse :kuribotchi:

~Reanna