Poem: So many are being made....

[Tamagirl_Desy]

Ok, alot of people are writing poems so I'll give it a shot..... :

One day you here

Then you were gone

My heart is broken so severe

I wish one day you'll come back

And lay your eyes upon me

Or tell me all the things I lack

When you were around,

I thought I was in a sweet dream

You were the only one who didn't make a sound

During rough times you might have cried

During angry times you would have tried

Don't hurt me even more

Please come back

And knock on my door

If you love me

Then you'll see that I can't live without you

I now live in sweet sorrow

I have loved many others too

But you're the only one who made a mark

Many people have walked in and out of my life

But only you left footprints in my heart

A smile is okay

It's alright for friends

But me and you are more then that

We should be together until the end

Without you, I feel alone

And still I swore

I'd hide the pain

I'd play the game

But I miss you

And that's all I'll ever do

Other people love you too

But only I will be the one crying

I'll be the only one dying

Because my heart is missing a piece

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Whadda think? I wrote that poem actually last year (XD) but I added some things on to it. So......give me an answer before I explode! xP

*Tgd*

 

[tama_girl7777777]

Very well done!!

 

[dora55214]

its great! ^^

 

[tamaluver977]

8!

 

[Tamagirl_Desy]

Thanks guys.

And to the people who rated me zero, could you please at least be courteous and actually tell me why. Sometimes I think people just like to be rude and rate others badly, and leave without a word. If you truly disliked my poem, why?

*Tgd*

 

[nyatchi_chan]

It's a very good poem, but probably the most

used topic of all time. Try writing about

tamagotchi!