A poem I wrote about someone I love ..

[-lWeride]

I love her alot,

not sure if she loves me

thinking all alone

in a depression spree

mixed thoughts going through my head,

But its getting to close,

to the end.

By, Micheal L

Age 9

3/8/08

This is my first poem about my life ..

 

[tama 3445521508]

Umm is this about a gurl you liek or something? cause it kinda looks like an emo poem. It's pretty good though!

Tama 3445521508

 

[Tama_Becca]

Well, that is pretty much how love is described. Meh.

Its a nice poem, for your age ^-^

 

[-lWeride]

no, its not a emo poem. and I am not emo xP (not that there is somthing wrong with them at all!)

Its kinda like the words just flew into my head! It was so cool to write.

Thanks for the nice compliments so far !

 

[Demetra-x]

Good job! Keep writing, and you'll get even better. I know how it feels to wonder if you're loved or not by somebody you care about, so I could relate to this poem. It was well written, and not only describes your life, but probably other people's mixed emotions and feelings as well.

I'm eager to read anymore poems you write. So, if you make any, send them to me and I'll for sure take a look!

 

[Tama*Lover]

Great job! If you study poetry more online and through books, you'll be a great poet if you really try someday!

 

[-lWeride]

Great job! If you study poetry more online and through books, you'll be a great poet if you really try someday!

Thank-you

 

[~TearsxarexlikexStorms~]

I really like that poem. It's insightful, and very touching. I think if you really want to impress her, show it to her.

 

[-lWeride]

I really like that poem. It's insightful, and very touching. I think if you really want to impress her, show it to her.

Thanks for the advice, maybe I should try it !

 

[crazyy*tama]

That's a really good poem. I like ^-^

 

[blue♣slip]

well, i don't think it's emo.

 

you're nine?

 

if she didn't love you then, i'm sure she'll love you now.

 

 

and i think you should keep writing poems, or even songs. i'll buy your album ^.^

 

[-lWeride]

well, i don't think it's emo. 

you're nine?

 

if she didn't love you then, i'm sure she'll love you now.

 

 

and i think you should keep writing poems, or even songs. i'll buy your album ^.^

lol, xP I've never thought of music indrustry. I'll give that thought.

And yep I am nine ..

 

[Tams girl Pink]

Roses are red, violets are blue (I thought they where violet XD)

I hope that that girl will like you back too.

 

[-lWeride]

Bump xD

 

[nottytama]

just a tad depressing.... but good

 

[-lWeride]

just a tad depressing.... but good

Yea, I need to work on the depressing part of the story and maybe turn it somthing less depressing.

I think it is the end that makes it more depressing.