Mametchi and Chamametchi's Adventure 1

[Southparkkennyfan]

Please be honesest and tell me what do you think!This is my first ever fanfiction!

 

[Southparkkennyfan]

Oh and i'm going for 20 or 10 views

 

[Runner]

Um, it's okay; plot is good. It's just that you had to attach everything into one huge clump... You didn't use the space bar at all in between sentences so it looked like this "Hello"Mametchiwalks"This is great"Chamametchi said

Quite a few grammar mistakes too.