I started writing this a long while ago. I know it's probably not that interesting at first, but it does get better. Feel free to leave comments. I'd appreciate them very much!
I like it. Just one suggestion. Don't post loads of parts all at once. Leave a while between posts. I made the same mistake and nobody bothered reading my story.
Your writing is AMAZING!!!! I LOVE IT! You should become an author or something. Really, you should. Each part of the story is exciting, fun to read, and just cool! How'd you do it? I love writing, and I've been trying to write a few chapter-books, but I'm not sure any of them are good enough to be published yet. Anyway, WRITE MORE SOON!!!